After a discussion with Sean about the animatic, I have gone with a suggestion of his to change part of the story. After the guinea pig plays the drums and discovers that he can't reach the cymbal, he ties the sticks together to try and reach that way. The suggestion was to show that the cymbal was what the guinea pig desired more than anything. This would be shown using close ups, extreme close ups and jump cuts between the cymbal and the guinea pig:
Guinea pig misses cymbal (after playing drum rhythm.) Guinea pig lowers his arm, and stares at the cymbal. Jump cut to close up of cymbal, swaying gently. Cut back to Guinea pig, eyes wide and wanting. Cut back to cymbal. Cut back to the guinea pig, closer close up shot. Cut back to cymbal. Cut back (again) to extreme close up of the guinea pig. Cut back to the cymbal. Cut to extreme close up of Guinea pig's eye, the cymbal in his pupil. Cut to medium close up of the guinea pig, waving his arms to reach the cymbal. Cut back to medium long shot of guinea pig, still desperately reaching the cymbal, but he is clearly too short. Realising this, the guinea pig slumps down, giving up in despair. Close up of guinea pig, looking sadly at the cymbal. Point of view shot of the cymbal, still wavering gently. Cut to mid shot Guinea pig, sitting back, thinking, and having a brain wave.
I feel this shows a lot more of the guinea pig, and allows for real character.
Bron
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